The morning sun
blinding, even behind closed eyes, brings the pounding in my head to my
attention.
I try to sit up.
Every muscle in my body screamed in the attempt, worn and sore as if I was
thrown around inside washing machine.
I rub out the
stiffness in my neck as my eyes adjust to the bright sunlight, revealing the
scene around me. As I lay in the warm sand around me, my eyes scan the small
shoreline, seeing nothing but beach and the wild vegetation crawling its way
out of the thick jungle.
I pull myself up
to my feet, giving the world a few seconds to stop spinning before making my
way to the jungle line. I take a minuet to scan the jungle for any signs of
life, only to be met with the dark shadows on shades of green and the smell of
damp earth.
I made my way
through the dense vegetation, heading north, the only way home that I can think
of. As I walk among the damp underbrush, my memories slowly return to me,
answering the many questions that have been swimming through my head all
morning.
I remember a great
storm…
The rain pouring
down, lightning crackling through the darkness…
The Waves crash down, destroying the ship…
destroying everything.
I remember
drowning… being slammed against the sea floor, only to be swept up again by a
wall of water.
The jungle began
to clear, opening to shoreline. I looked out to the vast ocean before me,
realizing there was little hope of anyone ever finding me.
How have I already
walked across the entire island?
Suddenly the waves
began to split a few yards from shore. From beneath the waves, what looked like
a giant rock rose from the depths. As it rose higher into the air and water
rushed form the feature, I realized that it was the head of some creature,
rising from the ocean. The head of what looked to be a giant turtle. And then
it spoke…
“My name is
Tortuga, protector of the oceans. I found the ruins of your ship in the wake of
a terrible storm.” He spoke. His voice was
deep and hollow, vibrating the very earth on which I stood.
“I was afraid
there were no survivors. That is until I found you floating among the drift
wood”
I was in shock. I
didn’t know what to say, even if I did know my mouth would not have let me speak
it.
“I am taking you
home”
“Th-Th-Thank you”
I stammered, finally spitting something out.
We traveled
throughout the day, well into the night. The long series of silence, floating
through the calm waters, would occasionally be broken as we drifted and talked.
He told me his story, and in turn the story of how everything came to be.
Tortuga is very old and has been around for a very long time, rescuing lost and
abandoned sailors find their way home.
I don’t remember
when sleep took me that night, but the next morning I was awoken to the sound
of shouting off in the distance.
A ship! I was
saved!
I shouted and
waved my arms in hopes of getting the crew attention. In turn I shouted at the
great turtle in excitement but he never replied, nothing but still water all
around the island. Was it all a dream? How long had I been out?
I boarded the ship
and arranged for my passage back home. As it set sail and floated of into the
horizon I watched the island for any signs of life. The island grew smaller and
smaller until it was nothing but a speck on the horizon, only to vanish from
the world once again.
Authors note: Most
of my inspiration came from reading the voyage of Sinbad. I thought the sea
tales were really interesting and found that at least the first 2 both had
giant animals in them. I've also always been fascinated by the ocean and how
powerful it really is, as well as what its depths may hide.
Hey Alex,
ReplyDeleteSo, first of all, my biggest fear is being caught in the ocean in the middle of a storm! When I saw your image at the top, I got a little anxious..
I'm so glad your the main character was saved though! And by a giant turtle named Turtle no less!
For revising purposes, make sure you go through your story and pick a tense you want to write in. You go back and forth between present and past which makes it a bit confusing in parts. It's a super easy fix if you just go through super slow and make all the tenses agree, I would know because that's one thing I struggle with a lot myself. You have excellent imagery throughout your story, that's definitely one of your strong points! I can't wait to see what else you write!
This story is full of action. In fact, if I were to describe it, I would say that it falls in the category of realistic fiction. The story was catching, and drew you in even at the times it got a little cliche. If you had an imaginative mind, you could hear the sea crashing against the newfound ship. Fun.
ReplyDeleteHey Alex! You might want to only use one label for your stories. Since you have “story” and “storytelling” as labels, only “story’” is linked to your name for blog comments. I was only seeing half of your stories! I think you can edit the posts and add the appropriate label.
ReplyDeleteYour story reminded me a little of the episode of Avatar: The Last Airbender with the lion turtle island. The first bit was incredible. You included lots of detail. This made your protagonist’s experience very realistic. It was like I was there. This was very nicely done. Even the end, with the island sinking down, was creative. I’ve found first person point of view difficult to be consistent with, but you did a good job with it.